lhudd ([info]lhudd) wrote,
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10 things at Fields

- Walking through this big swivel doors, the smell of strong fragrances flew in my face like a gust of wind. Someone must have gotten too carried away.
- There were some ladies getting their makeup done by the employees
- There is a huge ceiling display which looks like a paper chandelier hanging from the ceiling promoting calvin klein.
- It is a much older crowd. No children in sight.
- Workers out numbered the customers tonight.
- Pillars on the main floor gives the store a more victorian/classy feel.
- There is a water fountain in an odd place right when you get off the escalators- hope no one falls in!
- Holiday displays are all throughout the store on every floor distinguishing the season.
- All workers are professionally dressed in uniforms/matching outfits.
-Marshall Fields has 9 floors.
-Customers appear to be upper class- knowing exactly what they are searching for, like they are on a mission.

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[info]profjohnny

October 24 2005, 16:48:21 UTC 6 years ago

Lindsey,

I think you do a good job, although I'd like you to further engage yourself in description: for instance, #9 could be expanded a bit (what are the floors? why so many?) and #10 feels incomplete (why do they appear to be upper class? Is that universal)?

In short, try and invest this with more sensory information.

bestest,

john
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